Here is my writing on the "My Dream House". I would be grateful if someone would review my essay and give me feedback on the sentence structure and grammar of writing.
My Dream House
House is a place where we can shelter and it gives us
a protection from rain, heat , storm etc. Everyone has their own choice on what type of house they feel comfortable to live in, so do I. I enjoy to liveliving in a calm and open environment, so house built on small land (I'm not sure what you mean by 'small land' here) won't be my choice. I want a large open space surrounded by compound, where I can stroll, especially when I feel bored onat my job. I want the a garden in front of my house, which will give me a natural environment. One more thing to mention here, I want thea house which is far from main city and industrial area since I don't like thea noisy environment. Oh, yeah, what about the size of the house? I prefer the medium size of the house having,which has 2 or 3 floors in it. I don't like very large buildings because I have small family and I don't like to rent my home. I prefer to stay inon the second or ground floor during the summer season because the top floors is excessively heated heat up excessively during the very hot season, whereas I like to stay inonthe second or third floor during the winter, as the ground floor will be becomes excessively cold during that period. (Try to shorten this sentence or divide it into two) Next thing is abouta gym room, I would like to have a fitness center within my premise as I am a young boy and I want to be a healthy person.
I have mentioned so many physical needs (you mentioned only one of them, actually, - shelter) in my above paragraph (in my paragraph above), but I would like to
conculdeconclude my writingessayby saying thata cool and amicable family environment is must to should make our homesfeel like a heaven. Otherwise, it will would be a hell, and we would like to spend most of our time outside the home rather than with our famil yies.
This is probably my students' favorite writing project of the year! Students design, draw, and write about the house of their dreams!
The packet contains:
-Planning Papers (1 for topic and conclusion paragraph, one for body paragraphs- I print these two papers back-to-back)
This project also contains:
- complete directions and suggestions for classroom implementation
- a sample planner that has been completed
- a sample 5-paragraph description using the completed planners
- Editing and Revising Checklist
- Writing Conference Tracking Form
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If you and your students enjoy this writing project, please come back and take a peek at some of the other writing projects that I have written for various times of the year.
My Family Album: A Writing Project
My Mom (or Dad!) for President: A Persuasive Writing Project for President’s Day or Election Day
December Gingerbread House: Write for an Audience- Writing Unit and Craftivity Project
Valentine’s Day: Magic Box of Chocolates Writing Unit and Craftivity Project **My BEST SELLING writing unit!**
How to Catch a Leprechaun: March Writing and Craftivity Project
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